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One pound sterling is value at two dollars and nobody can deny that London is an expensive city, but is a good idea to visit the wonderful stores.


You can visit the fabulous Harvey Nichols in 109 knightsbridge, a two steps for the famous Harrods, also is an obligation for the tourist to walk along the Old and New Bond Street, where you can find the best stores of the world that are Tiffany %26amp; Co., Donna Karan, Ralph Lauren, H茅rmes, the stationery Smythson麓s, Chanel, Burberry, Ungano, Armani, etc.


Also if you would like to visit the coolest stores you can go to Convent Garden. In Oxford St. you can visit Marks %26amp; Spencer that have a fabulous underclothes and Topshop that have clothes that a British chic girl like.


You can visit King麓s Road that offer Thomas Pink, Manolo Blahnik, Viviene westwood, Lulu Guinness, etc|||One pound sterling is valued at two dollars. Nobody can deny that London is an expensive city, but it is a good idea to visit the wonderful stores.


You can visit the fabulous Harvey Nichols in Knightsbridge, two steps from the famous Harrods. You should also also walk along Old Bond Street and New Bond Street, where you can find the best stores of the world, including Tiffany %26amp; Co., Donna Karan, Ralph Lauren, H茅rmes, the stationery store Smythson麓s, Chanel, Burberry, Ungano, and Armani.


If you would like to visit the hippest stores you can go to Convent Garden. On Oxford St. you can visit Marks %26amp; Spencer, which has fabulous underclothes, and Topshop, one of the most popular stores for chic British girls.


You can visit King麓s Road, which offers stores such as Thomas Pink, Manolo Blahnik, Viviene Westwood, and Lulu Guinness.|||One pound sterling is valued at two dollars, and nobody can deny that London is an expensive city, but is a good idea to visit the wonderful shops.


You can visit the fabulous Harvey Nichols in Knightsbridge, or the famous Harrods. It is also obligatory for tourists to walk along the Old and New Bond Street, where you can find some of the best shops in the world such as Tiffany %26amp; Co., Donna Karan, Ralph Lauren, H茅rmes, the stationery Smythson麓s, Chanel, Burberry, Ungano, Armani, etc.


Also if you would like to visit the coolest stores you can go to Covent Garden. In Oxford St. you can visit Marks %26amp; Spencer who have a fabulous underclothes and Topshop who have clothes that a chic British girls like.


You can visit King麓s Road which offers Thomas Pink, Manolo Blahnik, Viviene Westwood, Lulu Guinness, etc|||One pound Sterling is valued at two dollars, and nobody can deny that London is an expensive city, but it is a good idea to visit it's wonderful stores.


You can visit the fabulous Harvey Nicols,at 109 Knightbridge, which is just two steps from the famous Harrods. A must for any tourist is a stroll along Old and New Bond Street, where the famous storesTiffany%26amp; co, Donna Karan, Ralph Lauren, Hemes, chanel, Burberry, Ugano, Amani and Smiths the newsagents.If you would like to visit the coolest shops, then tourists should head straight for Covent Garden.


InOxford St you can experience Marks %26amp; Spencer, where you can purchase beautifully made underwear. TopShop is also along this road and here the British modern girls love to shop.


King's Rd is another popular tourist area, where Viviene Westwood, Lulu Guinness, Thomas Pink, Manolo Blahnik etc are found|||Hey, I had to alter the wording in parts, so that it made sanse as much as possible. Try to avoid using etc. at the end of long lists. PM me if you need anything explaining.





One Pound Sterling is valued at two Dollars. Nobody can deny that London is an expensive city, but is a good idea to visit the wonderful stores.


You can visit the fabulous Harvey Nichols at 109 Knightsbridge, a two steps for the famous Harrods, It is obligitary for tourists to walk along Old and New Bond Street, where you can find some of the best stores in the world, such as Tiffany %26amp; Co., Donna Karan, Ralph Lauren, H茅rmes, the stationery Smythson麓s, Chanel, Burberry, Ungano, Armani and many other.


Also if you would like to visit the coolest stores you can go to Covent Garden. In Oxford St. you can visit Marks %26amp; Spencer, that have a fabulous underwear range, and Topshop, that has clothes that many fashionable British girls like.


You can also visit King麓s Road, where you will find Thomas Pink, Manolo Blahnik, Viviene westwood and Lulu Guinness.|||How About:





-change 'value' to 'valued'


-Caps Knightbridge


-Make it, 'also an obligation'


-'Where you can find the best stores in the world, which include...*so and so*'


-'Also,' COMMA 'if you would like to visit the especially nice stores....*so and so*'


-THE LAST SENTENCE SHOULD START WITH 'And don't forget to visit', instead of 'you can visit'.|||One pound is the equivalent of two dollars. Noone can deny that London is an expensive city, but is a good idea to visit the wonderful stores it has to offer.


You can visit the fabulous Harvey Nichols in 109 Knightsbridge, two steps for the famous Harrods, also is an obligation for the tourist to walk along the Old and New Bond Street, where you can find the best stores of the world that are Tiffany %26amp; Co., Donna Karan, Ralph Lauren, H茅rmes, the stationery Smythson麓s, Chanel, Burberry, Ungano, Armani, etc.


Also if you would like to visit the coolest stores you can go to Convent Garden. In Oxford St. you can visit Marks %26amp; Spencer that have a fabulous underclothes and Topshop that have clothes that a British chic girl.


You can visit King麓s Road that offer Thomas Pink, Manolo Blahnik, Viviene westwood, Lulu Guinness, etc|||The mistakes are plenty. A lot of it just doesn't make much sense the way the sentencing are put together, the punctuation, etc. Allow me to rewrite:





"Nobody can deny that London is an expensive city, where one pound sterling is valued at two US dollars, but it is a good idea to visit for the wonderful stores.


You can visit the fabulous Harvey Nichols at 109 Knightsbridge, which is just two steps from the famous Harrods. It is also recommended for tourists to walk along the Old and New Bond Street, where you can find some of the best stores of the world including Tiffany %26amp; Co., Donna Karan, Ralph Lauren, Hermes, Smythson's, Chanel, Burberry, Ungano, and Armani, amongst others.


Some of the coolest stores are located at Convent Garden, and on Oxford Street you can visit Marks %26amp; Spencer, which has fabulous under-garments or TopShop, which sells clothing aimed at the British chic.


Another good place to visit for a great shopping experience is King's Road. King's Road offers stores such as Thomas Pink, Manolo Blahnik, Viviene Westwood, and Lulu Guiness."





I would further advise that you change some of the words that you used more than once (such as "fantastic") so that your descriptive style has more variety. Think of a better word to describe what you are talking about, as "fantastic" is very vague. I'd also add a closing sentence that wraps your paragraph back up to the main thesis of the paragraph. Something like:


"As you can see, despite the fact that many people consider London to be an expensive city, the shopping experience makes a trip there worthwhile."|||One pound sterling is value at two dollars and nobody can deny that London is an expensive city, but is a good idea to visit the wonderful stores.


You can visit the fabulous Harvey Nichols in 109 Knightsbridge, a two steps for the famous Harrods, also is an obligation for the tourist to walk along the Old and New Bond Street, where you can find the best stores of the world that are Tiffany %26amp; Co., Donna Karan, Ralph Lauren, H茅rmes, the stationery Smythsons, Chanel, Burberry, Ungano, Armani, etc.


Also if you would like to visit the coolest stores you can go to Convent Garden. In Oxford St. you can visit Marks %26amp; Spencer that have a fabulous underclothes and Top shop that have clothes that a British chic girl like.


You can visit King's Road that offer Thomas Pink, Manolo Blahnik, Vivienne Westwood, Lulu Guinness, etc "I have corrected the Spelling Grammar seems fine "|||One pound sterling is valued at two dollars and nobody can deny that London is an expensive city, but it is a good idea to visit the wonderful stores.


You can visit the fabulous Harvey Nichols at 109 Knightsbridge, just two steps for the famous Harrods.


Highly recommended for the tourist is the walk along Old and New Bond Streets, where you can find some of the best stores of the world e.g. Tiffany %26amp; Co., Donna Karan, Ralph Lauren, H茅rmes, the stationery store Smythson麓s, Chanel, Burberry, Ungano, Armani, etc.


Also, if you would like to visit the coolest stores you can go to Covent Garden. In Oxford St. you can visit Marks %26amp; Spencer,which have fabulous underwear, and Topshop, which has clothes that a British chic girl lwould like.


You can visit King麓s Road which offers Thomas Pink, Manolo Blahnik, Viviene westwood, Lulu Guinness, etc.





Note the changes.


I hope this helps.|||too many run-on sentences